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Directions 6
Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the two pictures,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. point out the consequences for this phenomenon.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
在写作中，审题这个环节是非常重要的。在图画作文中，我们不仅要仔细审视图画，而且还应将英文的提纲看清楚。这篇文章配了双图，双图多是表示对比关系，这里是凸显时间的先后。提纲包括三个部分：描写图画、阐释含义和指出后果，这就决定了我们文章的结构走向。
Sample:
Two pictures above describe a story which we would never wish to encounter. In the first one, a large crowd gathered around a man lying on the ground. One person said, “He seems to be drunk.” Another whispered, “His head and hands seem to be bleeding.” In the second picture, a policeman is asking those who were present, “Why didn’t send him to hospital?” The first one said, “I was hurrying to work.” The second one said, “I was hurrying to school.”
It is quite obvious that the drawer wishes to draw our attention to this most unfavorable social phenomenon. Many people are used to finding all kinds of excuses to shirk their responsibilities of helping those who are in need of help. In their eyes, their own daily businesses are always more important than those of the strangers, even their lives.
This phenomenon will bring a series of harmful consequences. First, when people refuse to take care of the strangers, the danger of accidents will be much higher, because you have only a small group of people to rely on whenever emergency arises. Everyone may come across accidents from time to time, and mutual help will prevent most of them from being destructive. Second, the possibility of attaining a happy life will be much smaller. If everyone only takes his own interests into consideration in face of big events, the society will be full of selfish people. The social cost of achieving success will remain high before cooperation becomes a habit.
If any one of us wants to enjoy a happy and secure life, we have to be prepared to extend our helping hands to others including strangers, for helping others is equal to helping ourselves.
点评：
这篇文章最终写成了四段，结构非常清晰。第一段分别描写了两副图画，语言简洁流畅。注意这一段不宜过长。
第二段是测度作者的意图，共三句话，第一句是一个经典句型：It is quite obvious that the drawer wishes to draw our attention to... 这句话直指图画所揭示的社会现象，后面两句来具体说明：先说许多人千方百计找理由以逃避帮助他人；然后解释原因，他们认为……注意段中句子之间的逻辑关系，这是非常重要的。
第三段写了该现象引起的有害的后果，该段的首句是个经典的模板句，后分两点来说明。第一点说明当人们不愿意帮助他人时，事故所造成的危险就会大得多，因为那样的话每个人能依靠的人（即亲人和朋友）是非常有限的。这一点的第二句话是个难句，展现了很强的句子内部的逻辑，希望大家用心学习。这句话的意思是：每个人都会遇到事故，而相互帮助可以避免大部分的事故造成毁灭性的后果。到这里，我们可以看出，思想是由语言表达的，要想深刻地表达思想，一定要多模仿、多操练。第二点是从更广阔的角度去考虑问题，说明获得幸福生活的可能性减小了。社会充满了自私的人们，获得成功的社会成本陡增。
末段是结语——如果我们想要享受幸福的生活，我们应向他人（包括陌生人）伸出援手。
第二段的第二句中的shirk ones responsibility表示“逃避责任”。第三段第二句的emergency表示“紧急情况”。第三句的destructive表示“造成重大损害的”。第五句的in face of表示“面临”。最后一句的cooperation becomes a habit表示“合作成为一种习惯”。
心得：
1．文章的结构层次一定要清楚，这是充分理解提纲与图画构成语境的结果。
2．学习写作主从复合句，充分理解句子内部的逻辑关系。通过本文，重点学习条件状语从句。
典型的条件状语从句：If everyone only takes his own interests into consideration in face of big events, the society will be full of selfish people.
嵌套原因状语从句的条件状语从句：If any one of us wants to enjoy a happy and secure life, we have to be prepared to extend our helping hands to others including strangers, for helping others is equal to helping ourselves.
Directions 7
Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the two pictures,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. point out the consequences for this phenomenon.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
提纲包含了三个部分，这篇文章可以分为四段来写，其中末段是结语。真实写作中前三段可以与提纲有明显的对应关系，这样的安排思路清晰，易于把握。
Sample:
In the pictures, we see clearly a person who claims to begin his grand scheme tomorrow. In the first picture, he claims that he will begin tomorrow because he is not yet well prepared today. In the second picture, when tomorrow really comes, he again says he will begin later because he is not feeling well at the moment.
What can we say at seeing such pictures? We can always find excuses for our mistakes, failures and inaction, but how can we make real progress in our life? We will never ever grow up if we keep on finding excuses instead of looking directly into the matter, analyzing the situation objectively and taking action as soon as possible.
Delay has a lot of bad consequences. In many cases, we will lose the chance to succeed forever. Time is limited, and so are youth and enthusiasm. When we form a plan, we should always try our best to put it into practice immediately. We should not worry about failure, because we can always learn from it. Only if we keep on trying and never stop, will we make progress and eventually turn our dream into reality.
The important thing in life is to have a great aim and the determination to attain it. Without action, a great aim will be nothing more than a castle in the air.
点评：
第一段分别描述了两幅图画，独特之处在于首先将两副图画的共同之处提取出来——描写一个人说明天就要开始宏伟的计划，而后分别描述两副图画的不同之处——这样做的好处是使段落的条理清晰。
第二段的首句使用了设问句，一下子引起了读者的兴趣，而后自己给出答案——我们总是能为错误、失败和无行动找到理由，可是我们又怎能取得进步呢？这个句子中使用了平行的名词和反问句，效果强烈，非常引人注目。该段第三句进一步说明，使用instead of强化了对比关系——如果一直寻找借口而不是直接查清事实、客观分析情况和尽快采取行动的话，我们永远也无法成长。注意句中否定意义的表达：
We will not grow up if...
We will never grow up if...
We will never ever grow up if...
在上述三种表达方式中，我们可以看出，最后一种不仅语气强烈，而且极富韵律。
第三段先说了拖延的坏处，而后说了我们正确的做法。
最后一段做结，共两句话。第一句是引用了歌德的名言，而第二句是反过来说——如果没有行动，伟大的目标就只能是空中楼阁。
心得：
要想写好文章，就要先写好句子，再写好段落。文章大的结构的确定是不难的，关键是写好单个的句子后再将它们有机地组成完美流畅的段落。
第三段就是一个好的例子，这一段分成两个部分，各有三句话，有机地结合在了一起。第一句先是讲拖延有很多坏处，第二句直接解释第一句——在很多情况下，我们就永远失去了成功的机会。注意这句话的写法，首先，使用in many cases表示“在很多情况下”，显得客观，因为不是所有的情形均是如此。其次，使用forever表示“永远”，加强了语气，并且恰如其分地指出了人生的悲怆，点出了韶华易逝的真谛。第三句是对第二句的补充说明——时间是有限的，青春和激情也是如此（句子的后部使用了倒装）。第四句笔锋一转，说明我们一旦有了计划，应当全力以赴立即将其付诸实践，注意这里使用了immediately，是反过来与该段的第一句话进行呼应。第五句说明我们不该担心失败，因为我们总能从中学到东西。末句是以only开头的倒装句，说明行动和结果之间的关系，语气很强。
Directions 8
Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture,
2. interpret their meaning, and
3. make your comment.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
这篇文章的提纲与2002真题类似，属于最晦涩的一种，但是经过仔细分析后，我们将发现文章结构并不难把握，一种好的选择是——第一段描述图画，第二段对绘画者的意图进行推测，第三段对第二段做进一步说明，第四段下结论。
这里面至关重要的是第二段与第三段的关系。通常的情况是前一段就事论事或泛泛而论，后一段进行概括总结、提炼升华。
Sample:
This picture sets me thinking for a long time. The parents themselves are playing mahjong, but they are telling their little child loudly: “Work hard. Don’t let us down.”
The drawer reminds us of a common social phenomenon. Nowadays, more and more parents wish children to study hard in order to embrace a brilliant future, but many of them do not know how to turn this dream into reality. We come across many parents who ask their children to attend all kinds of training classes, but is it that important in the making of a good student and later a successful person?
What is really important, according to the drawer, should be something else. That is the environment created by the parents and felt by the child. How can a child grow up into a scientist who loves research when the noise of playing mahjong is always there? Actions always speak louder than words. If parents turn off TV and family cinema, stop all noisy games and get down to reading quietly, the positive impact on the child will be considerable. In the years to come, the child will gradually learn concentration, which is an essential part of the learning process.
Across the nation, parents are investing more and more money on the education of their child. If they have a closer look on the learning process, they will know what is important is often how they behave, not how much money they spend.
点评：
首段的描述非常简洁，与众不同的是第一句话——这两副画让我思忖良久。
第二段的首句是一个常用的模板句，非常有效。第二句话说许多家长望子成龙，却不知如何实现这个期望。而后举了一个例子，许多家长让孩子参加这样那样的培训班，但是这在孩子成材的过程中就那么重要吗？
第三段是文章的关键段落。该段首句是过渡句，引出了下面的关键句子——重要的是环境，是父母创造孩子感知的环境。而后使用反问句——当一直有麻将声时，一个孩子怎样能成长为热爱研究的科学家呢？而后使用谚语——行胜于言。如果父母关掉电视，开始读书，对孩子的正面影响将是巨大的。最后说在以后的数年中，孩子将会逐渐学会集中精力。
最后一段做结，分两句。第一句写父母大量投资在孩子的教育上面。第二句表示递进，如果父母仔细审视学习的过程，那么他们将知道，重要的是他们的行为，而不是投入的钱。
心得：
句子中的好的用法一定要日积月累，这很重要。第三段的首句中有插入语的用法。第二句有名词由两个平行的过去分词短语修饰的用法。第三句中的when the noise of playing mahjong is always there是个精彩用法，表示“一直有噪音”，如果说没有噪音，可以说when the noise is down。第四句是个谚语，需要平时积累，注意使用时务求准确。第五句在条件状语从句中，有平行的动宾结构。本段最后一句中in the years to come是个好词组，表示“在将要到来的数年中”，之后有非限制性定语从句的用法。
Directions 9
Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture,
2. point out the reasons for this phenomenon, and
3. give possible solutions.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
这篇文章的提纲是图画作文另一种非常典型的提纲，在描述图画后分别给出该现象（或问题）的原因及其解决办法。这里在提纲中虽没有出现interpret the meaning（阐释含义）的字样，实际上这个步骤是不可少的，但可以做得极为简洁。
Sample:
In this picture we are surprised to see a group of fat children who want to lose weight at a dieting center. We can’t help asking such a question: why are there so many overweighted young children in present society?
In my belief, many reasons contribute to this undesirable result, but three of them play the dominant role. In the first place, with the development of national economy, people’s living level becomes higher and higher. Grandparents and parents devote all their love to the young children, who consequently often take in much more nutrition than necessary. In the second place, more and more young boys and girls are even addicted to foreign snacks, which contain too much fat and thus do great harm to the heart and the vessels. Last but by no means the least, pressure from teachers, parents and the whole society often leaves little time for small children to take part in physical exercises.
To solve this worrying problem, all of us should take immediate and effective measures. First, a balanced and healthy diet is often the most important factor in the making of a strong body. In this aspect, teachers and parents should do their jobs. Second, exercises should become part of their daily life—once children get used to sports, they will find it not only beneficial but also interesting.
All of us have realized the children are the future of our nation, and we should also realize that healthy minds always dwell in healthy bodies. To fulfill this goal, all of us should work hard.
点评：
该文章仍然是四个段落。第一段非常引人注目，只用了一句话便完成了对图画的描写，还加入了表达作者心情的部分（be surprised to see）。段落中的第二句话非常关键，是将图画总结为一个大家都该来关注的社会问题——儿童的肥胖问题。第二句话的作用相当于对画图人意图的测度，只不过由于提纲的要求，这里没有单独成段，而是放到了第一段。
第二段与第三段严格按照提纲来写，分别写原因和解决办法，段落的首句都是非常精彩的模板句。第二段首句的写法请大家用心揣摩——既显得全面（句子的前半部分），又不失重点（句子的后半部分）。该段之后分为三点来写，第一点两句话由浅入深，脉络清晰。先写随着国民经济的发展，人民生活水平提高了——这句话是常常用到的经典句子，大家应熟练掌握。然后写祖父母和父母将爱都倾注在孩子们身上，导致孩子们常常营养过剩。该句中大家应首先掌握非限制性定语从句的写法，该从句的拓展性非常好，能避免连写句（runon sentence）这样的常见错误。之后大家应学习词组devote...to...和more than necessary的用法。第二点讲越来越多的孩子沉溺于洋快餐。注意句中be addicted to和非限制性定语从句的用法。句中有一个难词thus（副词），这里表示结果。第三点讲述了孩子缺乏锻炼的原因——该句使用了特殊的句型结构，有助于我们拓展思路，注意学习leave little/no time for someone to do something的结构。
第三段分两点来说解决问题的办法。第一点说平衡健康的饮食是至关重要的，这句话中的making是个闪光点，表示“造就……的过程”。后面一句中的do ones jobs等于take on ones responsibility。第二点中使用了破折号，后面是时间状语从句，注意get used to(习惯于)和not only...but also...的用法。句子中出现了part的用法，注意这里不能加冠词，否则不仅不能加分，还要扣分。再举一例，大家细细体会：
Learn the phrase by heart until it becomes part of you.
这是表达效果很强的用法，文中的句子表示体育锻炼应成为他们日常生活的一部分，意思是成为了一种习惯。上面这句话表示将该词组熟记以至于永远熟练掌握。
最后一段使用了强势的推导方式，先找到对方（读者）认同的基本观点（孩子是国家的未来），而后推导出文中的重要观点（健康的心灵存在于健康的体魄）。第二句将目的状语放在句首，我们要做的工作放在后面，非常简洁。
心得：
对提纲的把握非常关键，我们应该做到看到提纲后立即对文章全文的构造有个全面的想法。
末段呼应前文的方式多种多样，不一定是严格地将文章中所述的思想再简单地重复一遍。
对于文章中的词组和句型，好的学习方法是将它们摘录下来，反复地进行多感官操练（眼、耳、口、手、心并用），这样我们的学习效率就能大大提高了。
Directions 10
Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the pictures,
2. point out the reasons for this phenomenon, and
3. give possible solutions.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
这篇文章的结构很清晰，可分为三段来写，分别是描述图画、说明原因和给出解决办法。
Sample:
In the first picture, a beggar says, “Have pity on me,please. I am old. I am blind.” In the second picture, he is eating to his heart’s content in a big restaurant. He tells the waiter, “Another fish, please.” We can say he is in fact a man with bright eyes.
These two pictures remind us of such a group of people who don’t want to work to earn a living. Instead, they disguise themselves as beggars to make easy money. The reason for this phenomenon is rather obvious. In such a society full of competitions, some people do not want to use their own hands to make a fortune. They also can not bear a poor life, so they make such a shameful choice.
To solve this problem, the government and the common people should join their hands. On the one hand, the government should issue policies to take care of those people who are really in need of help. Those fake beggars should be educated and punished in order that they give up begging and live a decent life. On the other hand, common citizens should also extend helping hands. They should report such madeup beggars to the police as soon as possible. If they can help such people learn skills, find jobs and live a normal life, it should be much better.
点评：
首段描述了两幅图画。
次段的前两句对图画所描述的群体做了总结——第一句话同时使用了remind...of...和who引导的定语从句，是个很好的模板句。第二句话以instead开头，凸显了对比。此句中有disguise oneself as（伪装为）和make easy money（轻松赚钱）两个词组，大家注意识记。之后对该现象做出了解释。
第三段给出了解决办法，从政府和公民两方面来说（段首的模板句清晰地表明了这一点），非常有条理。
心得：
首段的描述中要将两幅图画的对比描述出来。次段的图画总结和原因阐述采用了几乎相同的推导方式（不想工作——伪装骗钱；不想用辛勤劳动致富——做出了可耻的选择），看来有呼应之感觉。末段结构的层次感是由模板句奠定下来的，读来轻松流畅。
