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Direction 26
Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture;
2. interpret the meaning of the picture;
3. make your comments.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
这道题目属于哲理类的题目，可以用多种方法来说明图中所阐述的道理，文章的安排也有多种可能性。我们可以采用一种比较独特的方式，先描述图表，在第二段中就所表达的内容进行提问，在第三段中以举例说明我们对该问题的理解和认识，最后在第四段做结。
Sample:
A miserable picture unfolds before our eyes: a flood has destroyed a whole city. We can imagine the loss of lives and property. Under the picture, there was a thoughtprovoking sentence: every drop of water says it is not responsible for the flood.
This picture inevitably invites a series of questions: then who is responsible for the flood? Who has demolished the houses? Who has drowned the children?
A good case in point is pollution. Twenty years ago, most rivers were so clean—the water was drinkable and so many people went swimming and fishing. Only two decades later, many of them became so polluted that we can no longer drink the water—fishes have died out and nobody ever swims in it or washes clothes by it. Every one of us never thinks the industrial waste or the living garbage we once damped into the river would cause so serious a result—today the harsh reality has become too hard to swallow.
Finally we realize that every drop of water actually is responsible for the flood. Only if every citizen takes on his responsibility as a member of a family, a nation and the world can all of us wish to have a more beautiful future.
点评：
第一段对图表和图下的文字进行描述。这一段使用了少用的句型A miserable picture unfolds before our eyes以深化看到图画后受到的震撼。而后加入了联想性的句子We can imagine the loss of lives and property，这是不多见的。然后描述了图下的一句话。
第二段创造性地连问了三个问题，与图下的文字针锋相对，又为第三段的论述做了充分的铺垫。三个问题中，第一个问题直接与上段末句形成对立，而后面两句则是呼应首段的次句，可谓环环相扣，联系紧密。
第三段共分四句，举了污染的例子。第一句是常用句型。第二句和第三句形成了鲜明的对比——二十年前的河流清澈，二十年后的却污染严重。最后一句是关键——倾倒工业废料、生活垃圾的人也没有想到会有如此严重的后果。
最后一段是结论段，共分两句。第一句话正好与图中的话相反，这是在论述后得到的结论。第二句话引申说——每个公民都要尽自己的责任，我们才能拥有美好的明天。
心得：
在说理的文章中，找到切入点是很重要的，所以很多时候要用到举例。一般说来，有多种例子可举，并不一定哪一种就是最好的。这时由于时间有限，不可太犹豫。本文中举了污染的例子，解答了第二段中的疑问，也直接引出了末段的结论，作用非常重要，请大家用心体会。
Direction 27
Study the following pictures carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the pictures;
2. interpret the meaning of the pictures;
3. make your comments.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
这是一个非常好的题目，我们可以这样来构思：描述图表——分析其中道理——推广到生活中——采取行动。
Sample:
In the first picture, a young girl poured a whole barrel of water on a little flower in order to help it grow more quickly. In the second picture, the flower withered before long, and the child was crying—she wondered why things should be that way.
Trees need water to grow up, and flowers need water to bloom. But too much water can no longer be helpful—it can only hinder their growth and even kill them. Whenever we water trees or flowers, we should do it according to the natural principle.
Actually, whenever we take action in our daily life, we should follow the law of nature. It is understandable for us to dream of quick success and then take immediate actions to turn it into reality, but we should not be too hasty. If we are always in a hurry, quality often suffers, making it more difficult for us to attain the aim.
Up until now, we come to understand the meaning of the old saying “Haste makes waste” better. We should break our great plan into small parts, analyze the feature of each part and carry it out step by step—when we follow the natural pace of development, success will soon be in our hands.
点评：
本文共分为四段。第一段描述两幅图画，突出了其中的对比。第二段分三句来阐述画中的道理。前两句话说树与花都需要水，但过多的水不但无益，反倒有害。最后一句话说浇水要符合自然规律。第三段共三句话。第一句说在日常生活中，我们应遵守自然规律。第二句说梦想快速成功然后立即采取行动是可以理解的，但是不能太着急。第三句话说如果总是匆匆忙忙，质量肯定会受影响，达到目的就更难了。最后一段两句话，第一句话说我们最终更好地理解了“欲速则不达”这句话。第二句话说了我们正确的做法——将计划拆分成小的部分，分析每部分的特点，而后一步步地付诸实施。
心得：
该文由浅入深，环环相扣，渐入佳境，源自宏观上全局的安排和微观上语言的处理。从分析画本身的道理，说到我们的日常生活，再到我们处事的具体做法，非常自然，也使人感到亲切。
在语言上，首段采用了两句简洁的描述，突出显示了对比。次段首句采用的是平行结构。次句采用了破折号表示递进。第三段中第二句采用了表转折的并列句，第三句采用了条件状语从句。第四段第二句采用了平行的动宾词组，而后使用破折号，最后使用了时间状语从句。
Direction 28
Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture,
2. interpret the meaning of the picture;
3. make your comments.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
这道题目看似简单，却富含哲理，对我们而言是一个很好的挑战。在谋篇布局上，需要精心安排。可以这样做：在描述图画后，在第二段中直接对图中的论断进行批驳，而后在第三段拓展到社会生活中相关的方面。最后在第四段中下结论。
Sample:
In the picture, a young man is lying in bed and says to himself, “If I do nothing, I will make no mistakes.”
How ridiculous this statement is! To err is human—who can avoid making mistakes all the time? If we are careful and cautious enough, we can always learn from our mistakes and failures. So when we meet the same problem for the second time, we can tackle it from another angle and by another approach. After repeated attempts, we can reduce or even eliminate mistakes.
We can’t help thinking of the inaction of some government officials. Their chief aim in their daily work is to make no mistakes. Whenever emergency happens, they never take immediate action. Instead, they always report it to his superior and ask him what can be done. In many cases, time has been wasted and the best opportunities to make remedies have been lost. If government officials cannot make decisions and take actions, why do we need them?
Like the government officials, people of other professions should also take on their responsibility to do what they are required to do without hesitation. Mistakes are not a bad thing so long as we are determined to learn from them and make constant progress.
点评：
该文的结构安排非常精彩。第一段对图画进行描述，非常简洁。第二段共分五句，直接对图中人的观点进行批驳。第一句话使用感叹句，极言上述说法之荒谬。第二句引用谚语，说明“人非圣贤，孰能无过”。第三句话说，我们总是能从错误和失败中学到东西。第四句和第五句说我们在遇到同样的问题时，总是可以尝试不同的方法以减少甚至消灭错误。
第三段共分六句，以某些政府官员为例。第一句使用了常见的举例子的句型。第二句说明他们的主要目的是“但求无过”。第三句和第四句说紧急情况出现时，他们不采取紧急行动，而是汇报给上级。第五句说时间浪费了，最好的补救时机错过了。最后一句说，如果政府官员不能做决定、采取行动，我们要他们干什么呢？这一段将上述对道理的分析与当前社会生活中的现象结合起来，很有说服力。
最后一段有两句话，第一句说每个人都应负起责任，毫不犹豫地履行自己的职责。第二句说错误并不是坏事，只要我们从中学习便可以获得进步。
心得：
要想写好哲理性的文章，平时要养成思考的习惯。在行文过程中，先辨明道理，而后与时事相结合是个不错的选择。不要忘记最后给出有力的结论。
Direction 29
Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should:
1. describe the picture；
2. point out the serious consequences of this phenomenon；
3. suggest possible solutions.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
该题谈论了是一个非常令人担忧的现象——许多学生沉迷于网络游戏和网上聊天。结构非常清晰，分为三个部分——描述图画，说明危害，提出解决办法。我们可按照提纲来构建我们的文章，将文章分成三段来写。
Sample:
In the net bar, those who are present are obviously all school children. Different are the things they are doing on computers—some are playing games and some are chatting online; but the same are the expressions they wear before the computers—attentive and addicted. It seems that they are so absorbed in the unreal world that they may not notice anything around them in the real world.
As is known to all, the addiction to net games and chat can do great harm to children. First of all, it will affect their study by taking up a lot of time and energy. Secondly, radiation from computers will harm their health, especially their eyes. In addition, their indulging in the unreal world will have negative influence on their communication with people in the real world, and thus will hamper the development of their personality and mental health.
From my point of view, in order to solve this problem, the primary responsibility falls on parents, who are supposed to have more significant influence on the growth of children. By improving mutual communication, they can establish a better relationship with the children, make them feel they are cared and understood, and reasonably direct their interests. Next come teachers and schools, who, undoubtedly, play an important role in children’s education. Besides teaching knowledge in class, they should help children develop various interests to fill their afterclass time, such as sports and scientific invention. In my belief, the problem of children’s addiction in net games and chat can be solved through efficient communication and proper guidance.
点评：
文章的第一段是描述图画。共分三句话，第一句话说网吧里都是学生。第二句采用对比法，说不同的是有的打游戏，有的上网聊天，可相同的是都那样专注。第三句采用结果状语从句，充分描述了他们此时的状态。
第二段首句是段落的主题句。而后分三个方面来谈，第一点是影响学习；第二点是有害健康；第三点是对个人成长极为不利。
第三段分两个方面来说，即家长和教师，结构极为清晰。最后一句话是结论，是对前面两点（共四句话）的总结。
心得：
该文章是典型的“现象——后果——办法”模式的文章，通过分析图画和文章，我们可以迅速确定文章的结构和发展，这是非常重要的。
Direction 30
Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should
1) describe the drawing，
2) give possible reasons for the phenomenon, and
3) suggest possible solutions for the problem.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.
审题：
该文提纲可分为三个部分：描述图画；给出图画所表现的现象的原因；给出解决问题的办法。这是一种非常常见的文章模式。在提纲中直接给出主题的情况不多，如果没有给出，就应该在第一段或第二段开头明确地点出来。图画题一般有两种情况，一种是平铺直叙，直接写图画反映的问题或现象；一种是含义深刻，简洁的图画中蕴涵着深刻的道理。一般来说，后者的难度较高。这里属于前一种情况。
Sample:
In the picture, we can see clearly that two small children are showing off their father’s business cards. One says proudly, “My father is the manager of his department.” And the other immediately laughs at him and utters, “Oh, that’s nothing. My father is the CEO of a multinational corporation.”
The reasons why such a worrying phenomenon arises, in my belief, are as follows. First, in the social transformation period, some people pay more and more attention to wealth and status, and link success to such superficial factors, thus making a destructive compact on children. Second, today’s media, to some extent, have actually aggravated such an unfavorable situation. In films and TV series a happy and ideal life is often depicted as a luxurious one, which will inevitably have an adverse effect on young people who are still not mature enough to distinguish between right and wrong. Third, teachers, on many occasions, have not done a satisfactory job. The present education system sometimes attaches too much attention to the scores and grades of students and overlooks their personality development.
To change the present unfavorable situation all of us must make immediate and substantial efforts. The government should try it best to create a social atmosphere in which people cherish diligence, conscience and simplicity. Teachers and schools should make every effort to teach the students to grow up into responsible and enterprising citizens who are determined to contribute to the development of the community, the nation and the whole world. Parents should let students get in touch with the society, helping them know that a meaningful life is one that brings significance to others. Only in this way can we hope to solve such a disturbing problem and ensure the brilliant future of our nation.
点评：
该文共分三段。第一段描述图画。一般说来，先描述图画，后点明主题的情形比较多——这样写重在归纳，比较重视逻辑和事物发展的内部联系。而本文首句即点明主题，即本文所述的现象——孩子吹嘘父亲职位、相互攀比的现象——这样写开门见山，非常有力度。
第二段写了该现象产生的原因。第一句话是段落的主题句，而后分社会、媒体和老师三个方面来说。
第三段写解决问题的办法，第一句话是主题句，之后分别写政府、老师和家长正确的做法。这里没有使用象first,second,third这样的连接词，但由于采用了平行的主语，仍达到了结构清晰的效果。最后一句话是结论句，使用了强势的倒装句，句中使用了连词and，前面写“解决问题”，正好与提纲相扣，后面写“保证国家的美好明天”，是升华的部分，请大家用心体会末句的写法。
心得：
第二段与第三段均分三点来写，其中两点严格呼应，另一点并未严格呼应（家长）。这是平行之间见变化的高级写法，即两点是显性呼应，一点是隐性呼应。
