徐可风
Directions:
You are supposed to write for the postgraduate association a notice to recruit volunteers for an international conference on globalization, you should conclude the basic qualification of applicant and the other information you think relative。
You should write about 100 words. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use " postgraduate association " instead。
㈠ 试题分析
今年小作文让每个人都惊讶不已。“通知”!!!!吴一安女士居然考“通知”。考前有预测书信的,有预测备忘录的,也有预测“摘要”的,但很少直接把“通知”当成重点的。可风认为,吴一安女士领导下的命题组进行了一次成功的“反命题”。
“通知”目的都是告诉公众或相关人员某项活动或某个信息。在表达上要求简洁易懂,直截了当。可风提醒考生在大作文中往往战无不胜的“长难复杂句”在这里却英雄无用武之地。“通知”的写法非常灵活,笼统可分为正式与非正式。如果是有关部门就某事发出的通知,这要求结构严谨,用词确切,应使用正式的文体。如果是关系会议或活动的简单通知,就可以使用非正式文体。很明显这次吴一安女士要求考生写的是“结构严谨,用词确切”的正式文体,应为这是“有关部门”(postgraduate association)发出的通知。
在审题过程,考生应认真阅读题目要求,仔细审视。从Direction我们可以得到以下关键信息,这些必须包含在我们的写作中。
1 目的是 recruit volunteers for an international conference on globalization
2 包括the basic qualification of applicant
3 同时也包括 the other information you think relative。
4 落款用" postgraduate association "
5字数要求about 100 words,文章长度不符合要求的,要扣分。
可风强调,拼写、标点符号和书写时语言准确性的一个方面,在评分时,阅卷者会对书写较差的文章降低分数档次。
㈡ 参考范文
Postgraduate Association
NOTICE
CONCERNED STUDENTS! We are now recruiting volunteers to work for an international conference on globalization. This conference begins on Jan 29th and lasts till Feb 2nd. And we are looking forward to your active participation。
The applicants are required to own these basic qualifications. Firstly, s candidates hould have a strong professional spirit and cheerful personality. Secondly, applicants must have outstanding skills at English listening comprehension and the ability to speak Chinese and English fluently. Finally, students with relevant professional experience are preferred。
For further information, please contact the postgraduate association at 88888888, or send an e-mail to PostgraduateAssociation@sina.com。
Postgraduate Association
㈢ 范文点评
1 文章结构
范文的结构完整清晰,紧扣题目要求,层次分明。首先简洁明了介绍了会议的概况并提出欢迎大家踊跃参加。接着对应聘者的条件进行了阐述。最后留下了联系方式,方便同学们获取更多的相关信息。
2 语言亮点
① gain valuable experiences
② looking forward to your active participation 可风启示有不少动词短语中的to不是副词,而是介词,这点往往考生在写作时容易忽略的。
③ a strong professional spirit and cheerful personality
④ prefer这是个写作的高级词汇,可风提示考生重点学习。
㈣ 易犯错误
1 结构错误
由于题目给出的信息比较简短,有一些考生没有留意到“the basic qualification of applicant” 与“the other information you think relative”这两点要求。这些考生一开篇就用很长的篇幅写会议的内容,意义等。(可风觉得,这样写的考生肯定是背大作文的模板背多了,就开始乱套。)
2 表达错误
考生在考试写作中要重点注意避免以下四种表达错误:
1应用文格式出错;
2中文式英文;
3动词形态错误。可风启示,这三点也是考生在考场上检查小作文写作的重点。